Ian

38, from Sheffield, England. Amateur screenwriter, full time factory worker. No accolades or achievements to promote, no other idea how to market himself. Please help.

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Award Category
Screenplay Award 2022
Screenplay Award Category
Film Script
Women have been going missing, and the Police are doing nothing about it. With the world going to hell around her, Detective Silver will keep fighting to find the truth.
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Comments

Ginger Liu Sun, 02/10/2022 - 17:51

Watch how you describe women, “gorgeous,” etc. Men aren’t described the same. Some good writing apart from the women.

Veronica McKenzie Sat, 08/10/2022 - 21:09

This felt confusing to me. After a great introduction, the pace drops, and the dialogue and action did not feel cinematic enough.

Veronica McKenzie Sat, 08/10/2022 - 21:09

This felt confusing to me. After a great introduction, the pace drops, and the dialogue and action did not feel cinematic enough.