B. Romero

B. Romero is a writer, teacher, student, wife, mother, activist, and everything in between. Writing has been her passion since a young age and she is also a lover of all things horror. When she is not writing, B. enjoys reading, gaming, and watching horror movies. During school hours, you can catch her helping her middle school English students discover their love of literature. She lives in beautiful New Mexico with her wife and their Yorkshire Terrier. As a queer woman of color, she aims to highlight the social injustices in American society through her work.

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Writing Award 2023
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Comments

JB Penrose Thu, 10/08/2023 - 16:51

Congratulations on being a finalist in this illustrious group of writers. Given the impressive company and great honor, you may find yourself writing HEA for next year's entry! Good luck. Smiles//jb

JB Penrose Thu, 10/08/2023 - 16:52

Congratulations on being a finalist in this illustrious group of writers. Given the impressive company and great honor, you may find yourself writing HEA for next year's entry! Good luck. Smiles//jb

Samar Hammam Fri, 25/08/2023 - 09:18

An interesting start, a bit too much commentary at the beginning. Maybe a sense of direction could be woven in early as well. Well written.

Tammy Letherer Sat, 26/08/2023 - 21:26

I like the slow burn of this opening and the sinister feel of John's character. However, the description is too heavy-handed for an opening chapter and overshadows John's interiority. There is also some withholding going on. For example, here: His gaze immediately dropped to the bottom meat drawer, and he jumped as a cry escaped his lips. What did John see? A bit more of his thoughts at key moments would help.