Tony Durrant

I loved this first chapter. You introduced the main character well, and carefully introduced information without it seeming out of place.

The story flows, and I'm intrigued to know what happened in Afghanistan, and how things are going to work out in the future.

The description is just right, not too much, but enough to help draw a picture and let the reader do the rest.

I definitely need to read more of the story.

Crisp writing that draws you in as a reader coupled with enough plot introduction to get you invested in the well-developed characters and interested in what's to come. This submission has real potential and an engaging storyline.

I would definitely like to read more.