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Genre
Comedy & Humour
Screenplay Award Sub-Category
Film Script
Award Category
Screenplay Award 2023
Logline or Premise
When hot shot Hollywood screenwriter Justin Sole finds himself accused of murdering an aspiring actress, he comes to realize that he has sold more than just million-dollar scripts. A dark comedy that takes a satirical look at Hollywood, excess, and ego.
Submission file
795992.pdf

Comments

Felicity Wren Thu, 10/08/2023 - 01:44

The writer has a distinctive voice and writes a very recognisable character in Justin Sole. The script has a good pace, and is an easy read.

The flashbacks jumping around i time keep you on your toes. I would recommend another sweep for repeated dialogue and typos, and even though it is true to this genre, it would be refreshing to see some female characters that don't just want to sleep with Justin included.

Barri Evins Sun, 20/08/2023 - 04:27

The opening description is engaging but feels a bit like prose before moving to be more cinematic. Some effective subtext in the kitchen scene.

Lauren Cribb Peacock Sat, 26/08/2023 - 22:57

Great voice and and enjoyed the writing. Was hoping for a bit more of a powerful climax and result of Nina's death as I felt Justin Sole was built up so well. I agree with another commenter that other types of female characters are needed. Overall, i really enjoyed this and it was witty and clever.

Continent
Northern America