John Davis
Steve conveys perspectives and emotions in poems and songs. His draft memoir, Galvanized, tells how he overcame timidity as an air cavalry officer in the Vietnam War. A tuxedo cat from a shelter encourages him from a perch over his PC keyboard. Steve assists disabled veterans in getting government benefits.
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Golden Writer
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Comments
Powerful in its raw…
Powerful in its raw simplicity and honesty.
A haunting, realistic mix of…
A haunting, realistic mix of guilt, loyalty, and regret juxtapositioned within a wartime setting.
Interesting approach to a…
Interesting approach to a memoir, which uses several fiction traits to get inside the head of the main individual in an effective manner.
Smooth like jazz
A fascinating, heartfelt story powerfully and viscerally told. I wonder whether Chapter 1 is where you should begin your book, and there are times where it can be hard for an outsider to follow the story and insider jargon, but the writing is smooth like jazz, evocative and rhythmic. There’s real poetry here. I’m looking forward to seeing the story evolve.
Interesting Narrative Memoir
A narrative memoir with a good storytelling feel. The army banter/jargon can feel a bit specific at moments, but an intriguing start.
Good descriptive language
I like the descriptive language of this work. Some of these images are well-known, but this brings a unique perspective to the era and the historical elements.