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A prison warden struggles to live with the guilt after executing two innocent men. Determined to scrutinize the veracity of every future execution he must perform, he is convinced of two brothers innocence and plots to fake their executions. He succeeds in saving the older brother, but encounters agonizing complications leading up to the second faked execution. Worst of all, he may have saved a murderer.
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You got my attention from…
You got my attention from page one. That's how it should be done!
Good story. Lengthy dialogue.
This definitely has some prison break vibes with your own twist to it and the story is appealing, however, I wasn't hooked in from the beginning and there was a lot of lengthy dialogue, I definitely got lost away from the story at times. I would recommend trimming unless its a crucial speech. Show the reader in the meaning of the sentences instead of tell them. Overall, I think it is a good start.
Well done! Strong opening…
Well done! Strong opening. Deals with an important political and social topic and the story moves fast.