The Darkness

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In a stunning battle against evil, serial killer Edward Olson must stop himself from killing his ultimate trophy, Caitlyn Derry, the daughter of his idol, the now-executed Lace Ribbon Killer.
First 10 Pages

Thunder slammed, and lightning broke the sky. Edward Olson glanced at the flash that lit up the closed wood blinds. Without a word, he sighed. He wasn’t in the mood to dump a body by the river. Not in the pouring rain. But the urge to strangle Cynthia Langford wouldn’t let go. Edward tried to resist. He really did. He glanced at Cynthia, who sat next to him on his couch like a doe-eyed deer.

Couldn’t he have an occasional date without the pressure to kill?

But The Darkness, an entity only Edward could see, had its own agenda. The creature perched on top of the coat rack—head hung low, shoulders hunched. As if it were all a game, the beast click-clacked its upper and lower beak. Click-clack. Click-clack. With a lift, it flapped its spiked wings, whooshed across the room, and landed on Edward’s shoulder.

Edward glanced at his shadowy nemesis, a foot-tall creature with a beak, talons, and bat-shaped wings that could spread double its size when the damn thing flew—looking more like a thorn-covered pterodactyl than a large bird. Its teeth, sharp as broken glass and vampiric, created a sense of desperate evil. A good candidate for Satan’s favorite pet, Edward often thought.

Click-clack. Click-clack. Click-clack.

The nonstop sound grated Edward’s nerves causing a hard tension to coil through him.

He felt wound up and ready to pounce. And The Darkness wouldn’t shut up. Always push-push- pushing Edward into a rage. If only the creature would disappear. He often daydreamed of living in a world unhampered by the monstrosity and its cravings. He tried to imagine himself with problems like a bad job, a broken-down car, or a steep mortgage. But his fraternity in life had members like Theodore “Ted” Bundy, Son-of-Sam David Berkowitz, and Blind-Torture-Kill murderer, Dennis Rader—all plagued by entities that forced them to kill.

Click-clack. Click-clack.

Edward’s jaw clenched, and he swiped at the creature on his shoulder. The Darkness squawked, zoomed around the room, and landed on the other shoulder—its talons sunk deep.

As if it had a mind of its own, Edward’s heel pumped up and down. His head pounded. Leave me alone, Edward thought—the words whizzed in his mind like a violent hurricane. The intensity of his need gnawed at him until he had no choice.

Edward glanced at Cynthia and muttered, “Can you excuse me a sec?”

“Sure, doll.” Cynthia kissed his cheek. “Hurry back,” she cooed. “I miss you already.” She batted her hooded eyes.

Kill her, The Darkness insisted and leaped onto the coat rack.

Edward peered at the malicious creature as it snapped its beak open and shut, open and shut—escalating—becoming harsher, louder. Each click and clack taunted him. He felt as if a torture device was stretching his skin.

At one time, Edward thought he would get used to the click-clacking, but that never happened. The repetitive sound fucked with him like a hungry mosquito serenading an ear until it drove him into a rage. Edward curled his hands into fists, dug his nails into his palms, and sprang from the couch. As he barged toward the kitchen, he focused on maintaining control.

Just get me to the kitchen before I snap. But the ruthless shadow was already in the kitchen. Waiting. Click-clacking. The beast snorted then ground its jagged teeth together. The crunch of bone on bone—hideous.

Trying to get ahead of the terrible compulsion, Edward grabbed a bottle of Johnnie Walker Blue and gulped a shot. Sometimes it cooled him down.

But not tonight.

A zap of recklessness jolted through him. Edward paced. Another shot.

And the click-clacking. The racket infuriated him. He needed a break. “What should we watch?” Cynthia called from the screening room.

Edward had planned a quiet night—pizza and a movie—until The Darkness opened its cruel beak. And now, not even allowing Edward a chance to choose a film, the entity put him to the test.

Click-clack, click-clack.

Would you fucking stop? Edward slammed the scotch bottle against the Italian tile counter so hard it shattered. Glass and whiskey flew across the floor.

“Are you okay?” Cynthia’s voice swirled from the other room.

And The Darkness—again with the beak clicking. The sounds ricocheted from wall to wall. Edward knew only one thing would ease the wrath that boiled inside him. Only one antidote could heal the sickness that cursed him.

“Edward?” Cynthia called.

Her voice wove between the booming sounds in Edward’s head. His blue eyes, now black as death, focused as he strutted into the entertainment room. He no longer saw Cynthia. He no longer cared. She was nothing.

“Edward, what’s wrong?”

Her shrill voice seemed too much to bear. And the incessant clicking, then crunching of the teeth drove him mad. He grabbed Cynthia by the neck and squeezed.

Cynthia’s eyes filled with confused terror.

The Darkness landed on Edward—dug its talons into Edward’s back—and rode him hard.

The snapping and click-clacking reached a crescendo.

Cynthia, kicking and gasping, struggled to escape, but Edward held her firm—his strength too much for her. Although the light faded from her eyes, Cynthia refused to stop fighting.

Edward liked it when they struggled. It added to the drama.

The choking went on until Cynthia lost consciousness. Edward let go and slapped her until she came to. At first, she seemed disoriented, but seconds later, she tried to scream. His large hands went right to her throat—squeezing until she passed out again. He brought her back. Then strangled her once more. He took pleasure in blacking them out then reviving them.

It’s like playing chess with Death.

Edward’s smile turned vicious, and he skidded into a frenzy. He tightened his hands around Cynthia’s neck. Trying to untangle herself from his grip, she kicked. But Edward hung on. Squeezing the life out of . . . of . . . whoever the hell she was . . . until she succumbed. Burst blood vessels in the whites of her eyes looked like veils of red lace. Her tongue turned a tell-all blue. Small marks dotted her neck.

Edward fell back onto the couch, the kill rushing through him. He howled like the predator he was. He was so drunk with pleasure he felt as if he could float with the clouds, dance with autumn leaves, sleep on the sea. The sensation lasted a minute, sometimes less. Didn’t matter. Those seconds of ecstasy, those seconds of freedom, were worth the hassle of getting the body to the river in the rain. Mud or not.

The Darkness lifted from Edward’s back, stretched its wings, and disappeared into a gloomy corner of the room. Heady from the release, Edward pulled himself back into the now. Back to Cynthia, sprawled on the couch like a discarded rag doll.

Edward glanced at the clock. No wonder he was hungry. He picked up the takeout menu— pepperoni or sausage? He couldn’t decide. Hell, he had no idea what Cynthia preferred. To be fair, he ordered a half-and-half with a side of garlic fries then turned on the TV. Scrolling through the movies, he settled on Sleepless in Seattle. Romantic comedy, his favorite.

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Dacia Weist Sat, 29/07/2023 - 03:50

What a difficult thing to write about. You must love writing. Congrats!

Reet Sat, 29/07/2023 - 12:28

What a courageous lady you are. Congratulations!