Thank you so much!! This is SO GOOD and helpful. I sensed some of these things about my manuscript but don't have the experience to know what to do differently. I want Janu's own passivity to come out, this ambition is an uncharacteristic sprint to get to High Priestess so she can ultimately do very little, but that doesn't mean I need to write passively! Really insightful, thank you. "Immediate experience" is perfect. Thank you for your encouraging words as well; I want to do justice to the story in my head!
