Freya Masters
I have always loved writing. My writing has its roots in my childhood when I first started to write little stories.
I enjoy scientific writing and science communication. Following my degree from the University of St Andrews (Biochemistry BSc Hons), I attended Imperial College London for my MSc Science Communication. I am now working in science communication for UK Biobank in Oxford. In my spare time, I love to write songs on my guitar.
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You have a really beautiful…
You have a really beautiful way of writing. The use of imagery is really effective and your style is captivating.
Vivid Descriptions
The use of metaphors and vivid descriptions creates a profound connection between the reader and the protagonist's experiences, especially when describing the struggles with the disability.
Beautiful Chapter 1 opening
The opening imagery of the first chapter was powerful (I would maybe consider moving the preface/foreword to the end so you can lead with that punchier imagery). There is generosity in writing a memoir about living with a disability for others experiencing the same.
If I have one other note/suggestion, it's to look out for abstraction, especially chains of abstraction (e.g. if one were to write 'fragilities of life' and such), as this is a little less impactful than the more concrete and specific (a single event/image that conveys the fragilities of life).
I loved the part about the mountain Gaustatoppen, the pathos and vulnerability here - this is a section that has that sense of the concrete and specific.
Thank you!
From the bottom of my heart, thank you for your praise and insightful comments.