A missing actress, a superyacht full of stolen art, an FBI man with a hidden agenda, a love triangle and a web of deceit. Can Holly and stuntman Josh bring down the gang before they’re written out for good?
Prologue
The Guardia Civil officer was dead behind the wheel of
his bullet-ridden car, now just a sinister outline under the
moon. He’d had no idea who he was up against or why. A
blue light was approaching on a slow mountain road; his
back-up was coming - but far too late.
Out of the darkness one of the gunmen walked
towards me. I watched the shadowy figure turn and raise a
gun, pointing it my way. A shot rang out, but it wasn’t from
him. Silently, he dropped sideways, hitting the ground with
a thud. A brief kick of his leg. Then he was still.
A familiar voice bellowed in the blackness.
‘Holly, RUN! I’ll hold them off !’ It was Blanca. She
rushed the battle-scarred vehicle, picking up the dead
man’s assault rifle, but instead of running away I ran
towards her, joining her behind the dead cop’s car.
‘I’d rather die with you, Blanca, than be killed running
away.’ She smiled and squeezed my hand. We crouched
behind the car; the lifeless body of the policeman slumped
in the front seat. My pulse was thumping. Adrenaline
surged through me. We were waiting for the other
assailants we knew would come.
‘Know how to use this?’ Blanca offered me her hand‐
gun, as she checked the weapon she’d pulled from the dead
man’s hand. I took the black metal pistol, my finger curling
around the trigger in the dark.
‘I’ve only used one for filming, when acting on TV.’
That was make believe. This was real.
‘This one’s not a prop. It kills people. When you use it,
hold it steady with both hands, then aim and shoot. Don’t
hesitate Holly, it’s us or them. It’s not just you and me they
want dead, but Josh, and Laura too.’ I looked at Blanca,
but I could barely see her face, lost in the shadows of the
night. With shaking hands, I held the gun, and pointed it
into the gloom.
Earlier….
All eyes fell on me as I walked through the door, scanning
me up and down as I joined the ranks of the hopeful at the
auditions. Seven others were in the room, all women.
Here, careers would change and dreams would be dashed
for all but one of us. I smiled, and ran my eyes over the
faces looking at me. Some I barely recognised and others I
knew. I wrote my chances off when I studied the competi‐
tion, but I had to do what I thought was right for the role,
and let fate take its course, for good or bad.
The part was DC Daisy White, the new young detec‐
tive constable assigned to the Rural Crime Squad in the hit
TV series: Murder in the Manor. Ratings were high and the
critics loved it. The fame and money the part would bring
was astronomic compared to the work I’d had before, and
at 33, it was now or never. A show like Murder in the Manor
doesn’t come along every day. The new DC was supposed
to have been a former gymnast, and was expected to do
amazing stunts, everything from abseiling down towers to
leaping out of windows.
A few polite and outwardly friendly hellos and forced
smiles filled the room, but make no mistake, rivalry was in
the air. I sat down and an anxious silence returned as
nervous feet shuffled, and fidgeting fingers flipped through
the pages of scripts. There was the woman from Newton
Road, the long running soap; she was by the window in a
tight, A-line dress. The girl who played a teacher in the
kids’ comedy show Strange Academy was sitting in the corner,
baggy cashmere over a pencil skirt, chewing the end of a
pen and underlining words while flicking her freshly styled
fringe nervously. The rising star from Warm Hearts, the peak
time rom-com was standing up, pacing to and fro,
repeating lines in her head. She was the one I was sure
would get it. She had a big personality, even bigger hair
and a massive following online. The competition was on.
I’d carefully dressed to look the part, not quite in char‐
acter, but enough to resemble a detective. Slim grey
trousers and a grey-blue shirt; a navy textured jacket and
dark blue, stacked heel court shoes. I felt dull compared to
some of the others, but there was no going back. I’d played
cops before, so I had an advantage there. My mum’s
brother, my uncle Steve, had been a detective so it sort of
ran in the family. I was the fifth person in. It went reason‐
ably well but it was impossible to read the body language
of the casting team, and after doing my bit I slipped away
into a grey drizzle, writing it off as another near miss.
I was surprised when my agent, Kay, called the next
afternoon.
‘Holly, it’s Kay, you must have done something right.
I’ve been sent another scene for Murder in the Manor. Get
your arse over here girl, we need to record it ASAP and
send it back to them. Come on, chop chop!’
‘What? Great! Thanks, Kay, I’m on my way,’ I replied
and dashed out of the door. I recorded the short piece in
front of a phone in her office and she sent it to them there
and then. An anxious wait was rewarded by a call to come
back the following morning. I wondered who else would be
there. If it was the girl from Warm Hearts, I’d be stuffed: she
was brilliant. Maybe I’d just been asked back to make up
the numbers. My confidence was low.
So, there I was that morning, facing the final audition, on
the studio set of the incident room, at London’s famous
Elstree Studios. I’d lain awake half the night questioning
my choice of clothes, my make-up and my confidence. I
just wasn’t sure how to interpret the character. They’d
given so few clues and just said: ‘relax into the role’. It was
one of the quickest auditions I’d been up for, out of the
blue, with so little notice. I’d watched the previous episodes
and I knew the characters and the storylines. DC Daisy
was a new face in the show. A blank canvas where I could
really make my mark. There were only three episodes left
of the series to shoot. I was taking the place of another
female detective, played by an actor I’d worked with
before. Her character had been suddenly promoted to
another police job, so mine was being written in. There
was a chance DC Daisy could carry on into the next series
and even become a major character. There was also a
publicity tour with the lead star, Adam, and the rest of the
cast planned for the States in seven months to launch the
new season there, and exposure in America was one of my
goals.
Auditions are hard. Like exams, you’re marked, judged
and rated on a single performance. I was trying to calm my
nerves as I made my way past the exterior sets for long
running soaps and comedies. The everyday detritus of film
and TV littered the alleyways and storage pens. Lighting
rigs, tracks for cameras, rolls of thick black cables with
massive sockets; it’s not very Hollywood, and that morning
was damp, grey and cold, but it was familiar. I was no
stranger to backlots in film and TV. I’d had a few good
roles in a couple of successful TV series already, and I’d
grown up visiting sets.
My mum had been a make-up artist back in the day. As
a kid I would go with her at weekends and in the school
holidays. I’d look forward to sitting there, quietly fasci‐
nated, watching her work, adding magic and sparkle to
famous faces; hiding spots, cuts and, sometimes bruises too,
all soon masked by a cotton pad of beach frolic or bronze tan.
Mum could make even the spottiest face look blemish-free
and shining. Even mine at 13. I loved the fake injuries, and
the cuts and scars she sometimes had to put on to other‐
wise perfect skin. Mum knew it all. All the secrets and all
the tricks. Make-up artists are invaluable. I had a small
tattoo, which usually needed covering if my bare shoulders
were in shot.
I’d got the audition after my first film role which
followed on from playing another cop, PC Kate Kendal,
and then a nurse named Sarah. The film part had been a
nice little job, if not a bit unsettling, and it brought the
curtain down on me and Harry, my long-term boyfriend.
You might remember it? After Jo’s Party. It was part rom-
com and part ensemble drama. It played on subscription
channels after going on general release. Look out for it.
The plot was twelve people thrown together at a New
Year’s party in London. I was delighted when I got the
part.
I played Jas who hooked up with Taylor, acted by the
lovely Scott Williams – you know Scott? From First Team,
the football drama? Well, that helps, playing my first love
scene alongside someone you fancy is always a dream.
However, knowing they live with one of the hottest models
on the catwalk certainly isn’t. Scott was great, though. It
took me two takes to stop the embarrassment and the
giggles, which was very unprofessional I know, but the
director understood. He’d seen it before. Things go
through your mind when you do scenes like that, even with
a closed set – that’s when just the minimum crew are there –
although it still seemed crowded. Lots of people, all
looking at me. I had to do the little strip scene where I took
off a black bra. The bra had to be undone four times as
the director wanted different angles with quick reaction
cuts to Taylor’s face. Make-up had to hide the rash on my
neck which appeared after the first failed attempt at the
opening shots of the scene. They had to cover the small
turtle tattoo on my shoulder too.
Technically, the worst part of a scene like that is
remembering which knee is over which thigh for the close-
ups, and the high angle shots from above the bed. They
don’t teach you that at drama school. No amount of
Shakespeare, West Side Story and dance routines can
prepare you for your first proper love scene. I felt so
exposed, not just to Taylor who was acting the scene with
me, but to the camera too. But I know what you really
want to know. It’s the first thing everyone asks: tongues or no
tongues? You and your screen lover have to decide that
straight away. The director will tell you what he wants too,
and you have to agree or compromise. There’s always a
compromise, unless you’re an ‘A list’ star of course.
My love romp was the smallest of the scenes I was in,
but definitely the hardest to act. The other scenes saw the
couples play out their romances, some short and some
long. Mine – well, Jas and Taylor’s – was one that lasted;
they got engaged and lived happily ever after in true rom-
com style. I’ve been chasing that elusive storyline in real life
ever since. The last scene was their wedding. Actually, I
cried when we shot it. Yes, they were real tears. Have a
look, it’s a good watch. Would I do it again? Sure, yes, if it
was tasteful, artistic; and doing it led to the auditions at
Elstree for Murder in the Manor, after all.
You know, there’s a curse to playing in soaps and long
running dramas. On one hand it’s good, well-paid, solid
work. It brings fame and credibility and can be fun: you
know the part, you know the other members of the cast
and you can really develop the role. But it’s also restricting.
Sometimes even a career killer. Everyone just says oh she’s
so-and-so from that show, and that’s it. You’re typecast.
Unable to work again. I think science fiction is the worst. I
was once up for a part in a low budget series called Colony
Zero. Remember it? No? Well, I’m not surprised, not many
people do. It would have meant spending a lot of time in a
stupidly skin-tight silver jump suit on wires, floating in front
of a green screen, appearing to be weightless on a six-
month space voyage to another planet. I didn’t get it – the
part or the plot – and in retrospect I’m glad I didn’t. The
show bombed.
Murder in the Manor was just too popular a show to turn
down. The others on the production were all good actors.
Adam, who played Detective Chief Inspector Dez Steele
was a real star. I’d grown up watching him on TV. He’d
been an action hero in a spy drama, taken the lead in an
award-winning war film and been a handsome pilot in a
long running American series about an airline. He was
stunningly good looking as a young man, but even now he
was in his sixties, he was still pretty striking. Adam’s a real
legend. My mum had been his make-up artist in the 1980s
on a TV series he was doing at the time.
Everyone stopped as I walked through the big stage
doors onto the set. My heart raced but I wanted to appear
confident and positive, even though I was as nervous as hell
and convinced I’d be rushing to the loo at any second. The
producer and the writer, who were standing in the shadows
on the edge of the set, turned as I was led in by the
associate producer, Zeb. The writer gave me the creeps.
Her dark glasses and roll-neck top made her look like a
sinister extra. But all eyes were on me; I held my breath
and smiled. That fixed smile they teach you in drama
lessons. I was acting already, to hide my nerves. I looked
around but couldn’t see anyone else waiting to be audi‐
tioned. I guessed I was the first, or maybe I was the last,
although it was only eleven o’clock. I took a deep breath as
the producer, JJ Elms, spoke.
‘So, Holly, we’ve seen the clip your agent sent us of the
scene we asked you to do, and we’ve been really impressed.
You’re a natural to play DC Daisy White. Do you think
you can handle the physical stuff as well?’ His voice made
me uncomfortable, but my enthusiasm pushed me
forwards.
‘You kidding?’ I laughed. ‘Of course I can.’ I spoke
confidently, hiding my nerves.
‘Well, that’s reassuring,’ he continued, ‘because we’ve
called you back to tell you – you’ve got the part.’
‘Seriously?’ I gasped. ‘Wow, thank you! That’s unbe‐
lievable.’ I held my hands to my face, dropping my bag.
‘Congratulations, Holly,’ said a gravelly voice. ‘Wel‐
come to the show. It’s good to have you on board.’ It was
Janey Mullen, the director. ‘Excited?’ she asked. Her pres‐
ence was intimidating. Thick-set and sullen, she stood
there, arms folded, a heavy brown jacket on top of a white
pullover with black jeans over dark leather Doc Marten
boots. There were glasses over her cropped hair, with
traces of faded henna pushed away by dark roots.
‘Yes, of course. I don’t think I’ve taken it in yet. I mean,
being in one of my favourite shows. How good is that?’ I
was flustered and glowing red.
Janey Mullen just nodded, slowly. She was scary. I’d
read up on her before the audition. She’d clawed her way
up. There aren’t enough female directors in TV drama,
and it was good to see a woman at the helm, but I’d heard
she took no prisoners, and ‘Mull’, as she liked to be known,
had a menacing presence. I was sure there’d be no excuses
for second takes or fluffing lines.
It all seemed unreal. Soon I was saying hello and
shaking hands with the rest of my new TV ‘family’. To be
honest, they weren’t quite as welcoming as I’d hoped, and
certainly not like the cast on other long-running shows I’d
joined. There was something missing; I could sense a
tension I’d not experienced on other sets. People were
holding back and looking to see where Mull was before
expressing an opinion. The associate producer took Mull a
coffee before anyone else and seemed to be petrified of her,
asking if she was sure it was as she liked it. I picked up my
bag and clutched it tightly, feeling for the security of the
familiar.


Comments
The manuscript plunges…
The manuscript plunges directly into a murder scene, creating immediate tension and intrigue. However, the flow and pacing could benefit from tightening in places to make the narrative feel sharper and maintain momentum more effectively.
I found the 'chummy'…
I found the 'chummy' familiar tone a bit disconcerting in a 'suspense thriller'. I'd recommend another edit to get to grips with developing a style and approach more suited to this genre.
I like the premise a lot,…
I like the premise a lot, and I liked being dropped into the middle of the action. Unfortunately, this does need a very thorough edit to help with pacing, tone, and some significant grammatical issues to help make it better for readers.