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A gifted 31-year-old poet confronts eviction, poverty, and a complicated family legacy as she fights to become the UK's first Black Poet Laureate — one improvised, life-changing poem at a time.
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It has a feelgood factor…
It has a feelgood factor about it, like a Disney movie for the whole family. It's pleasant without being riveting, possibly because the setup feels a bit slow and drawn out. I'd tighten up the dialogue and get the reader into the actual story a bit faster. I'm not sure what the inciting incident is apart from the promise in the final scene that her big chance is just around the corner.
Thank you for this insight -…
In reply to It has a feelgood factor… by Stewart Carry
Thank you for this insight - I've cut down the first 10 pages, sped it up, tightened the dialogue, and now it ends right on the inciting incident of this episode, which was missing before! Really appreciate the feedback.
We need to hear her reading…
We need to hear her reading a poem a little sooner, but I love this idea.
Appreciate this, thanks. Now…
In reply to We need to hear her reading… by Robin Kaczmarczyk
Appreciate this, thanks. Now it starts with her speaking, cutting the laboured set-up!